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WOOO!
IT'S DONE, IT'S DONE I TELL YOU! Well, the first page anyway.Ok, soooooo...I'm SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO UBERLY EXCITED for my first awesome comic!
Oh yeah, I colored it. AND shaded! How's that for my second time shading, hmm? I think I did well. I realize that "what's the horrific noise" should be replaced with "what's that horrific nose". Shame on me for not spell checking.
The AWESOME bg is by
, one of meh best internet friends. Isn't it wonderful? 8DOk, if you're confused with what's going on, Deoxys is monologueing when a meteorite crashes into a satellite, making its signals go all weird. These signals bounce up to Deoxys, and he does NOT like them. It is said that Deoxys' gem is actually its brain. If you look at the gem in the last panel, it doesn't look too good...
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hi! I'm here to give you a critique 
Deoxy's thoughts and the setting certainly make an interesting beginning for your comic, but there are just a few issues with the way you've drawn it out.
The big problem is the lighting. There should be a very clear contrast between the shading and lighting, especially when this is taking place in space. I see in the second panel you did do some shading on Deoxy's, but what about earth? It should be night time for half of the world. There should also be some shading on the satellite and meteorite too.
Even with the shading and lighting you have done, I feel it still needs more. Space is really dark, so you should be using darker colors, and when there is a light source, it's going to be really bright. I suggest you study different intensities of shading and lighting because the shading you've done here doesn't help your picture appear less flat.
Also in the third panel, I hadn't even noticed the satellite was hit by the meteorite when I first looked through this, and that's partly because of the dark captions for the sound effects. Don't write in black on a black background! Captions should be clearly visible.
I also do not understand was is going on behind Deoxy's in the last panel, and the sound waves look like they are coming from him. Maybe try making the circles grow in size as they come towards him rather than shrink...?
That's my advice, hope you find it helpful!
Deoxy's thoughts and the setting certainly make an interesting beginning for your comic, but there are just a few issues with the way you've drawn it out.
The big problem is the lighting. There should be a very clear contrast between the shading and lighting, especially when this is taking place in space. I see in the second panel you did do some shading on Deoxy's, but what about earth? It should be night time for half of the world. There should also be some shading on the satellite and meteorite too.
Even with the shading and lighting you have done, I feel it still needs more. Space is really dark, so you should be using darker colors, and when there is a light source, it's going to be really bright. I suggest you study different intensities of shading and lighting because the shading you've done here doesn't help your picture appear less flat.
Also in the third panel, I hadn't even noticed the satellite was hit by the meteorite when I first looked through this, and that's partly because of the dark captions for the sound effects. Don't write in black on a black background! Captions should be clearly visible.
I also do not understand was is going on behind Deoxy's in the last panel, and the sound waves look like they are coming from him. Maybe try making the circles grow in size as they come towards him rather than shrink...?
That's my advice, hope you find it helpful!